I'm worried about the rhyme scheme and syllable usage, and how they don't stay consistant along the piece.
Without music to accompany it (provided it is a song) I wouldn't worry about the syllable usage yet. Personally, I like the flow of it, but if it were put to music you may run into some rhythmic problems, idk. The only thing that stood out to me as a 'don't really like this part' is the usage of the word 'disaster' in three consecutive lines in your last two stanzas. You use it twice consecutively earlier on, but that works. The last one with three didn't feel like it flowed well. That's my personal opinion.
Yeah, I've had this perception that I'm going to add a new stanza, but can't think of what to put. I guess I'll just bookmark it for when the words do come. I wrote this a while ago, so adding something doesn't feel right unless it's a perfect fit.
I understand that. I've got a piece I've been working on for 7 years. I believe it has been re-written and drafted 47 times (i keep a tally total next to the original). Maybe I'll post it here sometime. I have it memorized I've worked on it so much, but I look at it once or twice a month and see if something comes to mind that works to add to it, or if something stands out that I don't like. Those are the best pieces, the ones that evolve over time like the author does.