Art "Night Life" poem

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  1. DC

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    Wrote a short 4 stanza poem, figured I'd share it here for some critique. I've been writing a lot recently, hopefully going to publish a novel-length story in the coming future, so criticism is appreciated! All situations that would be grammar mistakes are intentional by the way.


    Night Life

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    the night and it's Beholder

    were They so young?

    hours pass, so bipolar.

    A Lifetime had sprung.



    the light has been dimmed.

    A Prey never so entrapped,

    the priest had her pinned

    A Package had been wrapped



    as an ant is to the moon,

    The Predator reeled Her in

    joyous ventures - end in gloom

    a capsule, The Capsule's firing pin



    A Lifetime had begun

    A Lifetime newly mapped

    A Lifetime through sin,

    A Lifetime due to Him.

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