The two people behind the first set that are blurred should be blurred a tad more to add more depth. It's good otherwise. I like the minimal effects and the C4D's fit right into the picture. I'm not good with text, but I will say that I don't have any problems with it.
I like the stock, however, I'd suggest blurring those 2 white/yellow effects more, as they're very distracting.