Sleep Tight Teaser

Oh man, was that cliché.

The text would have been better to just appear on the same shot as the spartan fading in and out.

 

It was constructive criticism.

 

Not much of a trailer... anywho, looks like you have the ability to edit it well. All the effects were grand, and the audio was great. You might want to work on your camera work, and general acting more though.

 

This teaser is supposed to show your skill in this area so people know what to expect. If you didn't show them what you're truly capable of, then you ignored one of the reasons for making a teaser.

 

It should make people want to watch what you have to show, it should make them say "Oh wow, this guy knows what he's doing" or "Did you see that action shot" or "wow, this dude has great artistic talent". It shouldn't be a minute of pretty much nothing. And yes it should reveal what said movie or video is about, that's kind of the point.

In halo, when you move and turn around it looks bad. Most machinima makers make up for this with camera work, certain angles, and sheer practice in moving the characters around. When you moved around it looked like any old spartan moving in a game, not someone standing up and getting ready. Know what I mean? You have to combine the most fluid movement you can muster with great angles and you can fix this.

I was just remarking on what I saw in the video, which I'm assuming is why you posted it here.

 

I didn't understand at all what you were trying to get across. From the music and text I'll assume this is a machinima that tries to develop and understand the physche of a killer.

But the scene didn't depict the machinima was about a psychotic killer. Without the music and text it would seem to be either about a soldier gone rogue or a terrorist or even just a douchebag that shoots hornets.

Avalanche isn't the greatest choice when trying to convey that mysterious introspective atmosphere. Looking down a cliff makes me think you're suicidal, but then turning around and shooting hornets makes me think you have no clue what's going on.

The text doesn't fit this kind of machinima at all, that's more for a montage.

EDIT:

Then end transition from "Sleep Tight" to "Coming Soon" was cool, but you only need to use that sound effect when the text changes, otherwise its just irritating. The text can still distort like you had it though. The difference in the red and green text and even the different effects for both isn't harmonious. It makes me think you're trying to show-off how good an editor you are by using various effects. Keep it simple and be consistent, the message comes through the filiming not editing.

The siren was waaaay out of place. In fact, it made me laugh, like I almost thought it was a joke.

These are just some things to think about when filming and editing your machinima.

 

Well when you have a intropsective trailer, people are bound to look under every nook and cranny.

How cool it is, is opininated, as for unrealistic I'm going to disagree. That sounds reminds of when a channel changes on TV. GTA IV used the same sound I believe suffice to say that sound is most realistically and properly used when the text changes completely. The repition of the same sound made me think that. Other "smaller" sounds would have worked better for the distortions. In fact sounds aren't even that necesary when distorting texts. Again simplicity is key.

 

Just as constructive criticism in order to convey the point that you mentioned here, I would have had maybe a group of people running towards the base and away from the protagonist. Maybe have very faint, in the distance talking, something like a "come on, lets go", to portray that this guy is a shunned member of a society that doesn't want him any more. That would be my only suggestion.