Some parts are over contrasted. And some of the effects need to be removed off of on top of the render/character. The blue streak on the right of the person is distracting, erase that part from the c4d.
Ooo, i like the colored version, nice flow, cept for the lighting on his face, i could go with out that. Acualy, in my opinion, i think you should take out all the lighting, it messes up the flow alot.
you use a lot of space stocks, and they're getting kind of old. Try out some different effect or stock C4Ds for some different effects.