My Poetry-A different kind of art then you all are used to.

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  1. The God of Grunge

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    I'm gonna be posting some of my poetry here, as this is the Graphics and ARTS forum.

    This on is called The Serpant

    Look to the windows,
    look to the skies
    it's a firestorm all around
    burning fields and dreams
    all smell the same.
    Over the balcony,
    over our heads
    frost coats the summer Sky
    cold inside
    dead out-side
    alive inbetween
    and now another god for me
    and now another god to worship
    and now another time
    to worship the serpant

    Comments and the like.
     
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    i like it. Goes with the name if you think about it.
     
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    Did you mean serpent? Whats serpant if it is anything? I like it though. Good job. I like how you kind of made it a sensory poem in a corruption/warlike theme as opposed to all of those nature ones.
     
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    Just curious, what is your inpiration?
     
  6. The God of Grunge

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    Serpant is just a poetic mispelling.

    Stylistically or specifically?

    Here is one of my earliest poems. I believe I wrote this in 6th grade.

    R/Reason

    We march idley into a lake of fire
    without a reason when beyond our eyes
    and perceptions roam the unamed tome from which I read
    the volume of reflection in truth in doubt
    high above our shifting eyes
    floats our friend the firefly
    I can't live, I can't feel pain
    I don't know why
    but you're to blame
     
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    Specifically
     
  8. The God of Grunge

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    It's for you to artistically interpret.
     
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    You seem to be lost. Consistently curious of life and its perplexities.

    That's pretty much the best way I can explain what I interpret.
     
  10. The God of Grunge

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    Tomorrow

    Carry me, carry me so far
    home is never close enough to a lonely heart
    I'll take my place before I drown
    I'll walk upon this earth

    Tomorrow is just a nightmare away

    Wax dreams will always melt
    hearts carved over the ocean
    will be washed away by endless tides
    of nothing and moonbeams

    Tomorrow is just a nightmare away

    Beautifully dead and relieved
    from a world without the breeze
    I used to feel upon my pale face
    I know I am home

    tomorrow is just a nightmare away
     
  11. redearth

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    I think I wanna say that this is in the wrong section, but really where else could you put it? I'm going to suggest a seperate section on CS if enough written work starts to be placed. Probably as a subforum of this.

    Ontopic:
    I interperet the Serpant as you have just gone through a huge revelation, turning your world upside down, and now you decide to leave it all behind and learn to live in a new life.

    Tommorrow just confuses me. From what I seem to understand you think your life is terrible, but as it goes on it becomes apparant that it is not all what you think, and that you dread the next day because of fear of what is.
     
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    Tomorrow is meant to be dark and contridicting. You are in the right vein.

    The last day on earth

    "The world is a deep and mysterious beast"
    said the trumpeter to his companion
    "one with many claws and eyes
    one-hundred passageways from which all creatures are born"
    He paused
    "Yet eternities ago we blinded those eyes
    Dumped downwards in a spiral toxins
    into the canals of hope"

    No one knows anything anymore

    The trumpeter stood in the moonlight grove.
    with his back leaned against the last oak tree, his companion near his side
    as he plucked out the acorns one by one
    he set them in two piles
    one three feet infront of him
    one, one foot behind him.
    To the first he sang
    "You are the lovers"
    to the second he sang
    "You are the sinners"
    He yelled

    "You're all the same!"

    He played his trumpet and let forth a chorus of bombastious granduer
    for just to serenade

    "Can you hear me?", he said
    "I'm playing this tune for you."
     

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