Hmm... I like the colors, but the text should be horizontal in my opinion and it will look much better if it was placed where the focal is looking and increase the size a little bit. Not sure with the font though but it's probably best if you changed it. Looking at the sig, I can tell that only smudging looks best here. I don't know, it is just something I feel is right. In summary, the C4D's should go IMO. Great job here.
Yes, the flow is a bit confused, and the C4Ds distract away from the focal. As mentioned, the smudging is great, as well as the colors. Maybe make her left arm a bit less smudged, though. Other than that, it looks pretty cool. What program?