Mortal Warfare

Looks very plain yet overpowered by the turrets and such imo

 

It is OK, but you could use this space some more. Like I did on this map:
http://www.forgehub.com/forum/reach-competitive-maps/109724-illusive-1-0-a.html

 

In all honesty, not trying to be mean or anything, but no one wants to read you bragging about how much better your map is. As a general rule I try to be courteous and not post links to a "better" map (especially one of my own) to prove a point. It makes it seem more like a "My map is better nyah " than a "Here's a tip"

Edit: By the way, your map doesn't use space that much better than his, at least with this one when you fall you don't have to walk around the whole map to get back up. Just a thought

 

I've gotta say, the map's got some potential. The turrets are a tad overpowering, because of their position right over the center of the map, although that could probably be remedied if you have a long range weapon like a sniper on the map to pick off a turret.

Also, there is a lot of neutral space surrounding your external platform, IE there isn't very much cover at all. Because it's so extremely open, there is almost no incentive for a player to want to take the risk of going out there. Add some cover and that is a nice addition to the map.

Overall though, a very clean, simple map with a good concept.