Rubble, and fire, and ashes, and dust A planet with plasma burned right through it’s crust A symbol of might, far off through the night sky Now crumbles, deserted, just waiting to die But who were the heroes who fought and who bled Defending to their final breaths The ones who let us live, and stayed there instead Respected much more for their deaths Team Noble were Spartans, in their final stand Their souls for the planet of Reach Sacrificing themselves, by no one’s command Their story is that which we teach Carter, a leader, from start to the end His presence demanded respect Not only a hero, but also a friend To all but the scarab he wrecked Katherine: with science she hacked and she stole As much in the tech as the field A vital asset to Noble team’s goal Until EMPs took down her shield Emile with his kukri, Emile with his gun To him all the killing was just some great fun He stabbed and he shot ‘till his heart’s final beat Even as the blue sword held him off of his feet Jorge was a big one, the lone Spartan II His turret as big as his heart His tiring campaign was finally through When the bomb was to damaged to start Jun with a sniper’s a thing to be seen With bullets no shield could deflect ‘could aim much better than any machine So Halsey, he had to protect The sixth noble, nameless, so guess what: it’s you! Badass hyper-lethal just like you-know-who His armor still changing in configuration I hear pink with flowers is quite the sensation! So there you have it, Spartans of which I preach Now go kick some ass, and play Halo: Reach!
Very nice. Props. Must have took you a while to write that. Very thought out and literate. I hope to maybe hear some more from you. I just started writing a view on Reach from a Civilians and Marines point of you. Their telling of the story of Reach. Of course its the Civilians and Marines you see in the missions, but the story goes a little further than the campaign with things that go on. Anyways, great work. I loved it. Keep writing!
That was amazing. Also, I could never figure out where Jun went until I read this. I don't know why, I just did.
I shed a tear. Just kidding. But still, awesome poem, man. You've got some talent. My favorite line was "His turret as big as his heart". Beautiful, man, just beautiful. Edit: This needs to get on the Bungie.net front page...
You change the format of your rhymes a number of times. Some times your rhymes go: A A B B And sometimes they switch to A B A B It's the one major flaw in the poem. Also, the poem seems to be working toward a rhythm, which would be great, but the rhythm is broken up a number of times by lines whose number of syllables did not fit the rhythm set forth. While poems without an obvious rhythm are fine, a poem that kind of has a rhythm and kind of doesn't is somewhat annoying. Now that's just my view, and the wording itself is great, it's just more the format of the poem that seems lacking to me. Anyways, just my two cents.