V1 is better, but it still isn't doing anything for me. I honestly don't know how you could improve on this without totally changing it.
i dont like it either but its my first time (smudging) oh and btw i really like your sig its awesome is that a vector sig?
A lot of it is. A mix of vectors, a lot of adjustment layers, and smudges. The lighting is not the best I've ever done. I first made it as a wallpaper and then just took a portion of it for a sig. Probably not doing so well for its flow and focal, but eh.
ok if you maybe directed the smudges so they're all in the same direction, it would look neater. and maybe have sort of a vignette as far as colors/shades go it would improve.
Even then, just simple smudging can't carry the piece alone. Not like this, anyway. You could incorporate a lot of different things like grunge or splatter brushes with a subtle use of c4ds and still focus just on mainly smudging a lot of it to fit your main idea, but that might not be what you're going for.