Parabola

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  1. Jex Yoyo

    Jex Yoyo POETRY, bitch.
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    At the top of the Pull
    Glaring down in that Hole​

    No matter how far down'd
    You will burst into flame
    Once you hurl to the ground
    And mask another name​

    Rising up from the storm
    Rising up from the dead
    Curving up to the warm
    Holy light in your head​

    At the top of the Pull
    Glaring down in that Hole​



    Am i getting any better? The poem is about how we live life; make a huge mistake and think it will never get better, but eventually it flows back up again and we soon begin to become condescending and arrogent of our high position in life, and we look down upon those at the bottom. And then while mocking them, we lean over too far and tumble back down ourselves. All of this happens in a motion reminescent of a Parabola. Of course there is so much more to it than that, but i thought it might help if it was explained at a basic level.​

    Anyway, CnC.​
     
  2. LOL zombie

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    Personally, It's really... dark.
    Not the poem, the tag.
    The lightsource is meh, looks pretty...not real if you say.
    And the C4D on the right looks too out there, and fake. Try to make it blend more.

    All i could tell off first sight, looking at it again for other things.

    Second look:

    The text is in an odd position.
    Is there a C4D on the right? Because if there is, it's well lighted( lol wurd?) and looks good.
    It also looks kind of, blurry. I think sharpening it would help.
     
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  3. Jex Yoyo

    Jex Yoyo POETRY, bitch.
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    Haha the point of it WAS to make it look fake, it is fake beauty, representing the fake beauty that comes from the confidence of being at the 'top' of the parabola, with the underlying dark surrounding you. I built the sig based on the poem. I can see what you mean though, i did overdo the effects somewhat.
     
  4. KratosAurion777

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    The sig is ok. I agree that it is pretty dark... Try moving the light down and right, closer to the center of the flower. Also, try increasing the contrast and saturation a bit, because all of the colors seem a bit desaturated. The text placement isn't bad, but the text might be better a bit closer to the flower, and in a brighter color, possibly a light pink from the flower. The C4D seems to be flowing down-right, while the flow of the flower seems to be up-right, so rotating the C4D might help with the flow a bit. The border is good.

    I like this sig, you are definitely improving with each new one. Keep up the good work!
     

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