I dislike the text, the top overpowers the bottom too much without the bottom loosing emphasis, so it is interpreted as unbalanced to me. All that stuff on the front of the mongoose is distracting, and I find the tag as a whole to lack a well-defined focal and is a bit too long for my taste. Oh, and I think the colors are bland. But I believe that you are improving.
The text is too big and takes away from the focal along with being badly placed. Colors need improvement. Effects are decent. Lacks the overall wow factor.