The Game Store - Trailer

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  1. SRC48

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    A new machinima I've been working on...
    YouTube - The Game Store - Trailer
    Not the greatest, but episode 1 will be great.'

    The series will continue for possibly 3 seasons, each consisting of 7-12 episodes. Enjoy!
     
  2. Scottash

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    Good things:
    - Choice of music, nice change from halo 3 soundtrack which everyone seems to use nowadays
    - Intro Sequence looked great IMO
    - Video Quality, I own a Hauppauge too so I know how amazing they are :p
    - Sound Quality of voices was decent

    Things to improve on:
    - Scripting, some of the lines could be tweaked a bit to sound more natural
    - Delivery of lines, the clarity of lines sometimes got lost near the end of a sentence [I had no idea what Chuck said at 2:42]

    I didn't find it very funny, but everyone has their own sense of humour, so it's not something you can improve on. Overall, it was decent but as you said it's just a trailer and the real episode will be better. Once you've established characters it'll be much easier to construct jokes around them based on their personalities and probably make episodes as a whole. Best of luck with this series, I'll keep an eye out for it!
     
  3. SRC48

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    Thanks for the feedback, replied in red.
    Episode 1 has some humor in it. This was generally an introduction to the characters, etc.
     
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    Get Sarge to write you a script and it will rock.
     
  5. SRC48

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    Haha, the next episode will rock.
     

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