I can has c4d?

The focal is hard to distinguish, i think some clever lighting could work well. Effects are good, keep it up :].

 

To much action going on, might want to turn it down...
also the text doesn't go well it it

 

Agreed with Kidbomer. There is way too much stuff going on right here and the focal is to hard to determine. The sig is oversharpened as well, exspecially the effects.

 

Yeah, it's way too busy. All of the sharp edges and the scanlines really make it hard to look at.