The lines kind of look sloppy and choppy.Try and "sketch" them if you know what I mean. Don't hold your pencil so tight and just flow with the picture in your mind. Other than that little critique, it's interesting and I quite like it.
Man you weren't kidding when you said "you draw what you feel." I'm kind of wondering what you were feeling like that day...lol. This one is really interesting too but I liked the other one you posted more. This one is a little sloppy at parts but is still really unique
I made this picture quite a while ago, about January of 08. I only posted it because it was my favorite from that time. Thanks for the critique, I always try to come up with something unique. Thank you. I was feeling very light-headed that day... lol. I actually have a photoshopped version of this I'll be posting on this thread soon. Of course, I have been using photoshop for like 2 months now, so it wont be perfect.