I'm a writer. In terms of creative content, I tend to do better when working with visual effects (such as machinima, movies, etc) but that hasn't stopped me from writing prose and poetry when inspiration hit. So I'll update this from time to time with my stuff. Not necessarily a place for critiques or anything (though you guys can flame the work, keyword: WORK, as much as your heart desires without being a ****) just to keep it collected in a place where I can check it down the line easily. So I start with a poem I'm rather proud of since my other work needs refining. Rusty understood the context rather quickly, see if you can too : P Spoiler Untitled- Essias Loberg Fie, Fie! The sigh is nigh! It comes and it goes as it wants. Why, why, must I abide by a truant, little thought? Spoiler The Game- Essias Loberg I stand atop an overlook, looking down below, watching all the busy people, running to and fro. What then, a wind does appear, imagine my surprise, feeling a hot air, coming from the skies. The breeze, a tease, blowing warmth, no one seems to care, still they saunter through the path, and all I do is stare. They soldier on, feelings gone, mindless as can be, getting to their business whilst I stand and see. Soon the night approaches, they seek immortality, to drudge through their daily lives of triviality. All content contained or linked within this post is the property of Essias Loberg.
Its k my name is more uncommon ive never really been a fan of old english....fie...fie...i find it hard to understand. Hell, i dont even know what fie means....
Spoiler Untitled- Essias Loberg Fie, Fie! The sigh is nigh! It comes and it goes as it wants. Why, why, must I abide by a truant, little thought? Let's start with the first line. Okay fie means something along the lines of annoyance. The first line means you are annoyed by something. The 2nd line means that the annoyance comes and goes. The 3rd lines means that why do you have to obey? or stay. The 4th line means something about someone who neglects their duties. Answer: You are annoyed by someone but not all the time. You have to stay by this person who ignores their duty/chore/job. Can I guess sibling?
Your analysis is correct for the most part, but the end result isn't, though I spose art is open to interpretation, so if that's what you got out of it, can't say otherwise heh. The way I wrote it is about the annoying triviality of depression, though a type brought on by a specific and (if seen objectively) trivial reason. final ****ing warning. stay the **** out of this thread because you apparently don't know how to stop being a dumbass, you've spammed here enough. another comment that doesnt completely relate to the thread gets your ass infracted.
updated with a poem about an experience i had people watching today at he USC football game...extended metaphor.
Do they seek immortality in order to drudge through their daily lives or is the drudgery the immortality?
Very nice metaphor. I wish I could understand it more, but I think I can grasp the meaning loosely. Good job on the rhyming pattern, especially using less commonly used words within the pattern. In related news, your title made me lose the game.
Well, literature in general is meant for interpretation, so whatever you assume is what you got out of it. I wrote this with a clear goal in mind but that doesn't mean any other is invalid, furthermore there are some parts I purposely left open. Which is why I think Katanga didn't quite grasp the metaphor. Basically, I was at a football game when I noticed this, everything in there that you can take literally, happened (i.e. me standing on something overlooking everyone, the people rushing everywhere). But I figured itd be a nice little metaphor for life in general since its a sort of microcosm representing everyone. They're all rushing around to get ahead of everyone else (in line), which is just as trivial as everyone rushing around to get ahead of others when we all die anyway. Btw, the title was meant to convey the basis of the metaphor, which was a crowd at a football game being the mass populace in life. However, I certainly thought of the /b/ meme when I wrote the title out. heh. And thanks