CnC it. I know its a bit crowded but.. I wanted it to be.. Not so open, if you understand what i mean.
Hmmm.... Its not... Great? Idk... The C4d is way too "overpowering" and it covers most of the render/focal Also it doesn't really have a flow. There is too much orange over it and it's just not very easy on the eyes... Idk what can make it better... Those are just some of the things I noticed that detract from it.
I have to agree with Terrax on this one. Also your text is a little distracting because of the colour and placement, the 2 white boxes also draw me away from your focal.