Cherry Tree When it's planted it makes me feel needed. When it's growing it makes me feel proud. When it's blooming it makes me smile. When the pedals fall and all the colors show, I'll have known that I was there to take care if it. To show it care, To show it love, To show it happiness And when the Winter comes and the pedals are gone I'll know that I have done my job to show it the world. And when she's finally grown, I'll be old and happy. __________________________________________________ It's a poem I wrote last night. It's my first one and I don't know how to even form a poem exactly, but I gave it a try. What do you think?
First of all, I must congradulate you on your bravery. Usually, no one posts poems. Poems generally follow a pattern unless you're advanced in them. So basically, you have two poems in there. However, the lyrics gave me a warm feeling. It makes me hate George Washington more and more.
Well, this one follows only two rhyme/general schemes so what you could do is change it from thisWith A B and C representing the schemes) A A A B B B C C to something more like A A A B B B A A or just reincorporate the first scheme into the last lines of the poem.
Yeah, I'm not worried about how it is formed to be honest. I just wanted to know if people understood the point of this poem.