Halo Fables: The Elephant and the Mongoose

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  1. ukilledkenny7

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  2. Cheeze

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    ....Turtle and the rabbit anyone?

    You probably need to be a little more creative. Just adding sexual jokes into an old folk tale isn't creativity.
     
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    thank you for the constructive criticism :)

    and yeah the "Tortoise and the hare" it was supposed to be a playoff of that. :)
     
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    Eh, it kind-of ran on for a little bit too long. Also, no offense to the people that acted them, but the voices were a tad annoying and off-putting. I know you were trying to for the stereotypical fast talking rabit and slow moving "elephant", but, eh, it was just not working.

    The humor was OK, at times. Nothing I haven't heard before, and although it was supposed to be somewhat non-original, you could of added a bit more "extra story" into it while still keeping it shorter.
     

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