Two soldiers, Sgt. Andrew Bryan and Pvt. Joe Newport are attending their first day at the new camp when a jerk named Pvt. Nick Owens decides to pick on the two soldiers. Andrew and Joe get annoyed and watch him as he leaved the room. They get back to work when suddenly then hear weird 80's music playing somewhere. They are just trying to do that their supposed to but the music is overpowering. Watch to find out how the problem is solved. This is my first attempt at an ACTUAL machinima, This has taken me a while to make and I've had the script forever, i just never had the time to get to it. YouTube- Van-Halo (A Halo 3 Machinima)
"Yea I just punched some babies on the way over here." ROFL. I actually enjoyed that quite a bit. There were some dry parts that probably just lead up to the funnier parts, but the script was overall pretty good. Also, the intro was really good in my opinion because the music and everything fit really well. Nice work!
Great for a first machinima... Being experienced(somewhat) I've noticed many things in this that many first timers never come close to. You had a pretty nice script, and good clips... The only real critiquing I can do is flow, it flowed a bit too slow... And Joe's voice actor(yellow guy) could use some more emotion... Great start, and I hope you stick with it...
Thanks. I agree with the flow thingy. I kinda rushed this cuz it was for a contest. But I think it turned out okay. And also Joe's voice is bad because I had to use my friends voice and he has had no voice over experience at all. But Its okay. THANKS MAN!!!!