This is funny because the title says 'Peotry' when it's actually hip-hop/rap lyrics! These sound like things you'd recite at one of those 'Angry Poetry' gatherings.
PWNED!!! Sorry, I just had to say that. Good job, even though something makes me doubt that you wrote these.
I'm not just "being titmar" when i say this... Those are really ****ing bad. You suck... I think Nemi is right though, you may have a future being a ghost-writer for some rapper.
@ whisper: haha yeah my bad @ Nemihara: yeah I've heard that a lot but I still consider it poetry @ Goodwhalesushi: I assure you I wrote everything I have posted in this thread @ Titmar: Why do you bother spamming this thread? Everyone is entitled to an opinion and I respect that but why exactly is it I suck? You said nothing about how I write other than that it sucks and then you go and prove your hypocrisy by saying I could have a career writing rap lyrics? I'm pretty confused, please explain.
Ignore Titmar, he's just being 'special', lol Fixing up your grammar, let me explain to you. Not many people here like rap, and I'm sure that continues elsewhere. So basically, he's saying 'it sucks so bad that it could be rap'. Titmar is Titmar. You're just going to have to learn how to tolerate him. Edit: Lol, reminds me of Eminem now. I mean, I could imagine him 'singing' this.
oh really I'm not a real fan of rap either. I like to think that these poems are deeper that rap lyrics. Nothing bout banging hoes and sweaty balls er whatever. Oh well if that's what you guys think then I'll try harder to make them less rap-like... But I'm not really sure what makes them rap-like to begin with
Personally I just finished a whole unit on poetry and got a test grade on it, and now I hate poetry more than ever.